Assignment 17A – Elevator Pitch 2
Reflection of Feedback: Based on the
feedback given and what I noticed I’d like to change, I realized there were
several key aspects of the pitch I felt I could improve upon with the most
useful feedback being to have more revenue drivers since the business is
specialized like this. I can't bore my audience - there is 0 chance of them
investing in my idea if they're all asleep! I can do this by changing my voice
and moving around.
What I changed, based of
feedback: I
definitely tried to space out the pitch more and not go for as fast of a
delivery, focusing on the key information instead. I also recorded in a
different location to add some diversity, and tried using the space more and
moving around more freely and often. I
also reordered sections to specifically explain and list our revenue drivers.
Ulysses. Nice improvements from pitch number one. In this pitch you have steadied the rhythm of your speech— I know how easy it is to talk a bit too fast in these types of assignments. You did great on that point.
ReplyDeleteNice work outlining what I’ll get as a customer and how much it will cost me for your services.
My takeaway for the video was that it’s perfect for beginners in the space, and I would recommend to throw something into your next pitch that will entice mid-range users as well.
Your reflection and comments above fit well with the outcome of your pitch.
Nice work sir. Keep it up Ulysses.